poetry critical

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Random Poem:

Desire
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You needn’t be old
 1
to have lived too long,
 2
nor need you be jaded
 3
to be old.
 4
Desire will weary you soon enough
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whether or not you hide in the idyll of the mind.
 6
 
 
Try walking under a full moon at eventide
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she will taunt you like silver lingerie:
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soon, you will be lusting over lunar luxuries
 9
whether or not you choose an idol of another kind.
 10
 
 
Her muzzle is warm and itchy
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like the muzzle of a horse,
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yet taunting as the muzzle of a gun.    
 13
 
 
Never mind that puckered lips play you like the flute:
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let the music slip you into it –
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A sensuous syringe
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she’ll drain you of daytime dross
 17
locked in mental monasteries.  
 18
 
 
Reach, my friend, through ruptured fantasies
 19
ravage victuals like Jerusalem
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and when your taste wane as those of Solomon
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with the ceasing of the wishes wafting from their yearning well,
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then sip turpentine like wine!
 23
Rape another’s mind and plagiarize their thoughts
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for your hair is starker than obscenities in synagogues:
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white as a baby’s sclera.  
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If you are so lucky as to revamp your ravenousness
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remember, there’s always your flesh.
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But most of all my friend,
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remember to forget that
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though yin may balance yang
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Yen is but herself.
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