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Random Poem:

The Precipitation of Lust
Pele

And when Picasso holds me I quiver
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her breath is warm on my eager flesh
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her skilled painters' hands,
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trace my outline in crimson
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trained fingers follow the contour of my thigh.
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Her gaze upon my mouth--intense
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and I forget to breathe.
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My mind is jumbled in passion,
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inextricably intertwined with thoughts of Picasso.
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She raises her hand
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to brush the strands of rogues hairs
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from my face
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my flesh jumps at the sensation
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but I find that her palms are no longer upon me
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yet I feel her still.
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Picasso's hands settle again
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and I lose my words when they find their place.
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She touches me the way only true love can
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with subtlety and finesse
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softly and with charge.
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Picasso inscribes her lust on me now
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with long sweeping strokes
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she pens words I have never known
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and colors burns my cheeks.
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I am flush with her, filled to the tip with her
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and with each gasp I know I fill her too.
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Our movement now is fast and slow together
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Picasso's and mine.
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Each heave and thrust
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our own rythmic dance
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a graceful ballet of limbs
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of devotion and desire interlaced.
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We are one in the moments that follow.
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her lips. mine.
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Legs no longer seperate but melded.
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her fingers now a part of me.
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And as we drift I see her closing eyes
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in the hazy cloud our love blinds us with
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and I know I have had a glimpse of heaven,
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strolled through these Elesyian fileds.
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I know freedom.
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I have found completion in Picasso.
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My muse returned
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and now I can be the bard
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and she the painter.
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Artists in our right,
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Picasso and I.
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We.
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Us.
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enfolded in one another.
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